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I hope you're happy.
I hope you're doing well.
I hope you're enjoying your new life,
at the cost of my own.

And I hope the sun shines where you are,
and that you're safe and warm, cause
There's only darkness where I am,
and I'm so scared and cold.

And I hope people stop to greet you,
and they make you feel welcomed, cause
Everyone just points and laughs at me,
and makes me feel so lonely.

I hope you're happy.
I hope you're doing well.
I hope you're enjoying your new life,
at the cost of my own.

And I hope he treats you good my friend,
and he never raises a hand to hurt you, cause
I know I would of treated you better,
and loved you forever.


And I hope you never cry the tears I've cried,
when he finally tires and leaves you, cause
This pain I am feeling is because of you,
and I'm dieing every day and night.

I hope you're happy.
I hope you're doing well.
I hope you're enjoying your new life,
at the cost of my own.

I hope you're happy.
I hope you're doing well.
I hope you're enjoying your new life,
at the cost of my own.

I hope you're happy...
I began writing this as a poem, but I was not in the mood for rhyming. (I know not all poems have to rhyme, but mine usually do.) Rhyming for me generally means I have to be in a happy mood and well... :( When I try to read it like a poem however, maybe just because as I said I am use to rhyming, it sounds horrible to me. I had actually written bits and pieces a while ago and then looking upon it later I decided to make it into a song. Obviously it is not a very long song and I can not describe how it will sound with scales and or notes... I am musically illiterate... ^^; But I can say it is sung some what slowly and only one acoustic guitar will be playing and at the very end the last of the chorus will only be sung, no guitar playing.

I know how long I want certain words to be sung and the tune it should be sung at in my head. I would not call it country nor alternative... more or less just sad... I may one day record it and or make a video either with pictures or something... but I can not play the guitar either at the moment even if it would just be the same chords (I think that is correct.) being played over and over again. (Nor do I even own a guitar...) Anyway, enjoy. :depressed:
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hummingbear Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You mean "you're."
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LinkNZeldaForever Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012
It is a distinct possibility. =D
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hummingbear Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
=P
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LinkNZeldaForever Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013
Hmmm... I finally fixed it. :hmm: I know someone told me the same thing and I have used the correct one when needed ever since... I am not sure if it started with you or not... :shrug: Thanks again. :nod:
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DeadOrSleeping Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Student Writer
"And I hope you never cry the tears I've cried"

Loooooove that line. :)
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LinkNZeldaForever Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012
Thanks... yea, I would hate for some one to drown. ^^;
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DeadOrSleeping Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Student Writer
You and me both.
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TheLegendofLuigi Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
As far as I can tell, I really liked the meaning and symbolism.
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LinkNZeldaForever Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2012
Thank you. I personally like Kings of Leon: Closer. Now that is poetry in music! (I suggest looking up Youtube for it with the subtitle "The Fountain" which plays clips of a movie. There is also a terrific fight scene from "Lone Wolf and Cub Sword of Vengeance" with the song and finally there is a remix of the song of just his voice, someone else making some kind of humming noise and a little beat in the back ground, it sounds much slower under "(Presets Remix) (Graphic)" It has the planet Earth as it's thumb nail picture and has videos of both the beauty of the world/nature and the death and destruction that war brings.

This, even though it started out as a poem, was never meant to be poetry. I consider poetry something deep, something to ponder and keep you thinking and wanting to reread it to find out something else, maybe a hidden meaning some where... But this was more or less just straight to the point. Perhaps next time I will put a little more "umph" into it, although my true feelings are still in this song...

However, with Kings of Leon: Closer... can you guess which story I had written with it in mind?
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